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At 7:10am on July 14, 2008, Karen said…: What a lovely compliment! Yes, I will definitely see Mamma Mia! The trailer looked really good, but even if it hadn't, I'd watch Meryl Streep act out the phone book.

At 7:17pm on July 13, 2008, Rachel Knaizer said…: ABBA rocks! More seriously, I love how there's a development of the speaker in this draft (one who identifies with Lisa) that makes the speaker even more empathetic. Your piece is now more universal and specific.

At 6:35pm on July 13, 2008, Charan P said…: I have particularly enjoyed being allowed to see how you have built this piece over the course of your drafts. I really like your edits. The picture that you give in this piece is a complete one. However, I can't help but want you to write more of them...

At 6:59pm on July 10, 2008, Karen said…: Stunning. So much left unsaid yet completely there in the subtext. Beautiful.

At 5:31pm on July 10, 2008, Liz S. said…: Thanks, Tom! Your piece resonated with me from the first as well!

At 2:35pm on July 10, 2008, Grace Messina said…: Thanks for your feedback, Tom. I appreciate your generous words.

At 2:32pm on July 10, 2008, Grace Messina said…: Tom, there were so many lines in your poem that I loved. "I thought, in New Mexico, maybe I would be able to run away from the jagged edge of truth." I don't remember that line in your drafts and it works so well. It reinforces the metaphor of "claws" for me...I notice you added in more details and, I feel, they make your poem stronger. You included ABBA! :) What a great line: "ABBA. Such an obvious metaphor—love is a gamble. Deliciously low brow." And you changed your ending continuing the gambling metaphor: "I don’t care if it’s a dead metaphor. I cashed in my chips." I enjoyed reading your final/first piece. Thanks for sharing.

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I am an eighth-grade English and drama teacher!

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Manhattan East School for Arts and Academics (M.S. 224)

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